Saturday, April 14, 2012

threat or men

looking for poetry in an article from the Chicago Reader, i used newspaper blackout technique; meaning via excision. the original article uses the word "creative" (or derivatives of it) 11 times within a total count of 1214 words. the article is about Tumblr as a threat to creativity. (i have already pointed this out to the author.)

anyway, this isn't about a public shanda -- this is about bad poetry! my own! just saying, look, i self-imposed a kind of crazy limit. it would have been more fun if there were more action words, more adjectives, more metaphors.


the first draft



(with line-breaks -- as i would read aloud)


threat or men:
what's really new
_______

allow the accused
culture.

argue for an 
uptick
above his core

assert a way of
attractive
without explanation.

for instance,
predict that an entire generation
is dwarfed
by moths.

i draw back

music about mere
conversation and control --

but demonstrate
remix of instincts

satisfied with reproducing
energy
large eyes and
weirdo icons

employ serendipity to project
and collage
histories
among the modes of
found sound.

you started
in the sample method

the notion that transforms
forests
into the outline of a story

the untold edge
often praised
for failure.

who didn't combine
drug
and long-haired,

but philosophy employed bleeding.
the cabal behind the big beat.

the Song
is responsible
the same way
raw material is cut
and rearranged in fashion.

knock out disillusion.
the piano with nothing.
even an artificial world
might have a point,
guided by replicating
and recombining its past.
defined as something that leaves
little Visions.

the new Zeus
of broken verse followed
my eyes
to chaos.
a fervor to swell
sui generis.
found by searching for words
like "blue" or "water"
and
mix tape
in a Voice of 100-
acre unearthed dances.

they struck directly
into the head.

the first material knowledge
to musicians
is one
ear.

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